Ralphie thought it all felt like an episode of The Chicago Code as he and Max cautiously followed the officer out the door and down the hall to the stairwell. She had her gun drawn, a grim, stoic look on her face, and moved with trained fluidity. Contrastingly, it was all Ralphie could do not to trip over his own feet.
Max followed a bit too closely, his head swiveling nervously, hissing into Ralphie’s ear. “This is such a mistake. We’ll be sitting ducks going down the stairs!”
“Are you kidding?” Ralphie whispered, breathlessly, in reply. “This is fucking brilliant!”
This is my response to this week’s 100 Word Song Challenge from Lance, Leroy, and Linda, Elvis Costello’s wonderful “Brilliant Mistake.”
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It’s hard to see the name Ralphie and not think A Christmas Story. I like the dialogue and endinga lot. well done, sir.
Thanks, Lance, been too long, good to get back into the 100 Word habit
yeah, it’s been a while. nice take, though I don’t think Ralphie would have said effing. LOL
He would have used “THE word, the big one, the queen-mother of dirty words, the “F-dash-dash-dash” word?”
You know, I believe you’re both right about that, seriously. Not sure what I was doing when I wrote “effing.” I’m changing it, and it will not be *quite* the same, but at least it will fit for posterity’s sake. Thanks!
Love this and I want to know more. Funny, when I read Ralphie my first thought was The Honeymooners 🙂
Thanks, high praise!