He stirred as sunlight filtered slowly through gauzy curtains. Muffled laughter came from somewhere beyond the half closed bedroom door. Rubbing his grainy eyes the blurred green digits of the clock showed 7:04. Her pillow was cold, her side of the bed undisturbed.
Emotions burned away the cobwebs of not-enough-sleep, firing as if from a revolver. Anger. Resentment. Confusion. Fear. Sadness. Regret. And then click, click, all the chambers were empty.
With a vacant stare at nothing he pulled on his clothes and opening the door he found her coming down the hall.
“I was just coming to bed.”
“I’m leaving.”
Go to Lance’s blog, don’t be intimidated, he wont just start beating you up for nothing, but he will share awesome writing, and his 100 Word Song of the week, which this week is Snow Patrol’s Chasing Cars. It’s one of my favorite songs.
This is an incredibly well-written response to the 100 Word Song this week. I love it! I am happy you are enjoying Lance’s weekly challenge.
Thanks! Now that I figured out how to link back on his blog I’ll be participating more often, I hope, lol
Ouch! That’s a ton of emotion packed into 100 words. It’s why I love this challenge so much. Likening his emotional states to the chambers of a gun? Brilliant!
Thanks for the high praise, Eric. Lance’s prompt is what’s brilliant. Words and music, two of my favorite things.
Love this:
Emotions burned away the cobwebs of not-enough-sleep, firing as if from a revolver. Anger. Resentment. Confusion. Fear. Sadness. Regret. And then click, click, all the chambers were empty.
So powerful with the visuals or rapid fire emotions. Awesome!
Thanks, Carrie!
I could almost feel the anger. Great job writing the emotions.
Thanks, and awesome job picking that song! An all-time favorite of mine. I was a honestly a little surprised it prompted this bit, but glad to share it
I love the use of the words for bullets in the chamber of his emotions. Truly awesome.
Thanks Deb!
like deb says, the bullets metaphor was perfect. I like the how the dark emotion leads you thru the 100. great job.
Thanks, Lance. Looking fwd to the next song
The emptiness left behind after the “firing” of all the emotions. Like the rest, I found the emptying of the chambers was a perfect image.
So brutal, and brutally good!
Thanks!